Early Morning Musings Part VI: The Escape Artist

I slip past
the lining
of a golden
ending
suspended somewhere
in
be
twe
en
nestled into cracks
in the system
tearing down
the concrete
high paced
death
machines
I am
breathing
faster, faster
now
it blurs
a mesh of
who I used to be
who I used to
know
sooner or
later
I’ll sink into that
soft earth
swallow the ashes
let go of the
knowing
feeling
smell
of it all

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13 responses to “Early Morning Musings Part VI: The Escape Artist

  1. I like the imagery of the “high paced death machines.”

  2. twindaddy

    I like this, but I’m curious about the format. Specifically, why was the word between divided into three separate lines? Not criticizing, just wondering.

    • For some reason I tend to break my poems up into very thin lines. The between being broken up like that is to sort of have a visual of something literally being inside of something else, if that makes sense. Maybe it would look better – and make more sense – if between was only broken in half, rather than in three lines? I just thought it looked better that way, and in my head made more sense – like something wedged into several spaces of that something else. Does that make sense!? Hey, I invite the questions. It means I’ve sparked your interest in some way! So, thank you 🙂

  3. Loved the rhythym on this – faster and more tightly wound until loosening up at the end, with a sigh.

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