life had once been defined by linears and absolutes,
. those
oh
so
determined
swatches of time .
stacked like esteemed leaders
in golds and blues
once, i’d been able to
drag them to the
middle
of the living room,
fan them out like
beautiful tarot cards,
. close my eyes,
choose some wonderful thing
at random.
then one morning the
sun
came
up
but everything was
. dull,
gray like rain,
still as death,
and i was barren.
i ran to the closet
. in the hall
tore past
coats
board games
orange rain boots .
but they were already gone
my gorgeous sanity
those delicate
patterns
of some life.
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So sad…sounds like metaphors for depression or mental illness? Or maybe just something more simple like nostalgia? Beautifully written!
I wasn’t sure where I was going to go with this one, but yes, I think it’s more in the depression zone.
Thank you 🙂
I dig the depression zone. This, my friend, is excellent. I am a sucker for loss, and you painted a beautiful picture full of color and lack thereof. So glad I found you!
Thank you so much, Martha! I’m so glad Yeah Write led me to your blog, too! 🙂
And I was barren… wow that was a really dramatic phrase with perfect timing!
Terrific poem! When I read this I saw someone looking through old photos and not being able to grasp the happy thoughts they once represented.
Thanks, Janna! So glad the images came through on this one!
I think it’s a beautiful poem.
Thank you so much, ranu.
Very clever Nicole – I really liked it!
Thank you, Stacie!
“…then one morning the sun came up but everything was dull…” That works beautifully as a description of depression. This is a gorgeous poem. You’ve done a wonderful job.
Thank you for your kind words, tinsenpup. 🙂 I’m so happy this one is getting so much positive feedback.
Wow. This is gorgeous and powerful and so awesomely structured! I love the way you’ve used punctuation in this poem. Actually, I love pretty much everything about it! 🙂
Thank you so very much, Suzanne! So glad you liked it!
Fabulous poem! I like the use of punctuation and bold words to add emphasis and play with the rhythm.
Thank you, Silverleaf!
I really dig the imagery in this piece. I enjoyed the contrast between the dull grayness of rain/stillness of death, and the image of tearing past the board games and the orange rain boots.
P.S. I love the scary doll heads in your banner. I have a similar collection ; )
Thank you, lady! I loved your piece as well. You have some serious talent for poetry.
And thank you! Then it seems we have the same taste for the macabre. 🙂